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posted August 10th, 2013, 12:17 pm


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August 10th, 2013, 12:22 pm

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I hope that this is not too hard to read, I really tried, argh.

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August 10th, 2013, 12:33 pm

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@Andressit: XD lolzz i like the page, but there are some grammatical errors though^^

"I didn't know what the hell was going on and I didn't even care at this point. I was too busy drowning in my own snot and avoided getting stepped on. If it was a dream did it mean that I was actually hurt in reality or something? I never had a dream that felt so incredibly real, despite being a little absurd."

Other than what i fixed, eveything else looks awesome XD keep it up

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August 10th, 2013, 1:02 pm

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@Beauty_of_Syn:
It would be a miracle if there wasn't any mistakes, haha

But yeah, I re-wrote the whole box a little while ago, because right after uploading (as always) I realized how odd it was. I hope it's better now!

Thank you for your kind comment! :--)

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August 10th, 2013, 1:17 pm

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@Andressit: XD lolzzz no problem. oh if you intend to keep the 'knew' in the first line, then change 'didn't' to 'never' XD

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September 6th, 2013, 8:54 pm

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this is super awesome so far! I love it! The text in the 3rd red box is edging on a bit too small to read easily. XD

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June 26th, 2015, 6:18 pm

DraconicEmpress

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*whispers* kick his (AHEM), ethel.

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